"On your marks, get set, go!" I zoomed in front of some children. I felt excited. I felt wind racing to my face. I heard cheering from my left ear. I saw the green finish cone fight in front of my face. I said, "I was first!" I lined up. I told Mis Clearwater. I got a golden ticket for sitting respectfully on the ground.
By Theo
Wow Theo! What an amazing piece of writing. I love the way you hooked the reader by starting with speech. I love that you used exciting words like zoomed and racing. This is a well crafted piece of writing. I can't wait to read some more of your stories!
Miss McDonald
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